Archived entries for Royal Court

Last One

So- that’s it! Finished… very weird. First drafts to hand in to the Royal Court on the 15th, some other writing stuff looking nice and promising (though not holding my breath!) and I can finally maybe not be quite so poor without all of the travelling – oh and the time! 2 days a week back to do stuff with. I have a lot of stuff bubbling away in my brain at the moment- particularly a radio idea which I may start work on after the 15th of Jan- and then see if I can get in contact with the producer I know at the BBC to talk it over… so all in all I’m feeling nice and positive. Just about. It fluctuates so much -and is bound to take a dip when I get into redrafting – though having said that- this redraft should be a lot less stressful than Being Someone Else – I can see the problems, and it’s a simpler idea, so hopefully it should feel good- honing it into a more demonstrative form! But, yes, the Royal Court YWP has been a brilliant experience- to make contact with the London ‘scene’ – to meet some nice fellow writers, make some friends, have a good reason to write and to keep my brain ticking over! The last session was finished with a really interesting conversation about if and how theatre can change people/the world. Really interesting- just skimmed the surface on it, but so interesting! I love discussing that kind of thing (though I probably came across as a bit odd).

And now it’s Christmas! Yay! Love Christmas, looking forward to giving myself a week off, giving out cool presents, and not having to worry about where the food and heat is coming from! Oh and the countryside – miss it so much! Need to go on some nice long walks, maybe even a trip to the Yorkshire coast. Love it! So yes, this may be the last regular blog entry as I leave for home on Saturday the 20th, so thank you for reading along with me on this small blog journey, and onto the next I say!

Merry Christmas and a very happy New Year.

Closing Time

Hello There! So, I am now oficially post rough-draft-1. Finished about an hour long version of the play late Sunday night/early Monday morning, printed off, and duly took it to the Court with me on Monday. So yes… obviously massive things wrong with it and most of it doesn’t make sense, but not bad for 2-4 very painful days work!

My main concerns…

  • Structure- the piece struggled out of one structure (very short scenes) into another, chunkier one halfway through, all of which are structures that I’m new (and thus not sure about how sucessful I can make them) to as before now I’ve always written closed time/space pieces
  • Characterisatlon. It feels like only Ona has any. I think that Dominic’s journey isn’t clear, and that he and Ona are both currently vying for protagonist- to a degree that serves a purpose and illustrates a journey in itself, and to another, it’s just confusing, argh!
  • Content. Obviously the play is completely different to how i imagined it, this is what happens when you write something- it twists and turns under your gaze as the characters grow and start to make their own decisions (sounds hippy-ish but it really does work like that) Although I think that is to be expected, it now feels like Maria is now tacked on, though I’m not sure how to involve her more. It was going to be a story about women trapped by male expectations but now it’s a story about the damage done by commodifying humanity. Also, I still feel passionately about the aims of Sci—Fi theatre, but sometimes the play seemed to just want to be about trafficking-not extrapolated into a single—child future… in which case it’s a very different, much grittier, and much more responsible, research heavy piece, none of which I’m afraid of- but it would be good to be able to decide a direction.
  • Dramatic Action. I felt like there was very little, and too often found myself forcing my characters to speak to fill the page, naturally a product of an intensive first draft, but need to work on heightening dramatic action, and avoiding it being a solely stylistic/genre piece
  • Form- The piece feels like a one act-er stretched too thin, (from previous experience of this script template, I’d say it was 60-70mins at the minute) does it need more story, or more characterisation? Or does it just need to be a one act play…?

So Yes! Bit scary, but good to have soemthing. We took 3 copies of the script into the Court, and exchanged with two others and the course leaders – in groups of 3 we produce a reader’s report of our pieces and discuss them next week- and Leo and Natalie get their feedback as soon as they can.

We also did something really interesting asa whole group- basically each person read out the first 2 pages of their script, and then everyone else wrote down frist reactions/questions etc on a little piece of paper anonymously, they were then shuffled, and handed over to the writer – Leo read out a first draft of his too. So we each left the session with 14 or so pieces of instant reaction to the first moments of our play- which was definitely very helpful! In general my feedback was that the piece was intriguing and full of detail, very vivid in terms of place (can also mean too many stage directions), the one which was clearly the course leader’s said it had a great sense of dramatic action and build of tension and that the “dialogue feels authentic and dangerously compelling” which is cool! though obviously some negative points, the most interesting of which was from one of the other class members- who suggested that I be careful the piece doesn’t make Georg a ‘big-bad-Lithuanian-wolf’, and that I could be construed as racist. This person also thought it was set in Lithuania (they said that the UK has brothels too, so in itself maybe I need to be clear that it is the UK in the first few pages) but still a good point- I am concerned about Georg being a stereotype, but I hadn’t thought about the implications of his being foreign, he just was- so perhaps something to be aware of? I have been concerned about him being a stereotypical pimp, but then it could be argued that part of being a pimp is playing to stereotype? And how do you be a nice pimp? interesting stuff, and having never knowingly met one myself, might be worth some kind of research (how do I do that?)… food for thought.

So, only two more weeks of London – this feedback session, and then a session on redrafting- then a month to redraft to a solid first draft level and we hand it in ont he 15th of January! Phew!

Oh I also went to the National Portrait Gallery – very cool, saw an awesome portrait of Emmeline Pankhurst which took my by surprise, and quite an astonishing picture following the passing of anti-slavery legislation where black people sit amongst politicians and peers in the 19th century houses of parliment. Stunning, really makes me want to pick up my paintbrush again- it’s been a while, I really want to work with oils but I can’t afford the paints/brushes/linseed and whitespirit that is required… ho hum!

I also need to earn some money, I’m just too poor. Especially now, around Christmas time… being poor isn’t nice :-(

Draft 1 Blues

Sometimes I don’t half wonder if just sacking it all off and doing a PHD wouldn’t be a hell of a lot easier. But that’s just the draft 1 blues talking- I don’t know enough of my play to be comfortable with it, and I haven’t got the confidence and experience to know for certain that I’m traveling in enough of the right direction to find it. I seem to have started writing a love story. So far nothing else has come into it. I know there’s lots of stuff simmering away, and it’s really good that I’m approaching it character and feelings first, but it’s hard to feel like it’s going to come together into saying something new, I feel like I’m like trying to give a boulder a transfusion, if you’ll let me take the metaphor to an extreme. Ona has become much more bolshie than I remember, well not remember, imagined, in my head, there’s a stoicism in her which would make you wonder why she didn’t just run away, but I think they keep her drugged a lot. And not every woman that gets trafficked can be a defeated mouse, people react in different ways don’t they? I think a lot of why I feel particularly weird with this draft is that before I’ve been very plot heavy to begin with, and this time, the characters are just talking, getting to know each other, and in a way that makes me feel vulnerable, as a writer certainly, and as a general control freak doubly so! I should really get back to it, think I’ll do some on the train tomorrow because that means no internet, and no internet means no hours of endless distractions. In the meantime, do check out the following wonderful things that I have found during hours of procrastination:

  1. Sarah Haskins. She’s amazing. Yoghurt, Cars, and Chick Flicks particularily worth a look, but heck, they’re only 3 mins long each, and all hilarious.
  2. Outnumbered - back for a second series, and just as brilliantly understated and true as ever, loving yet acerbic semi-devised script, and just the right amount of precosiousness make this worth looking out for
  3. Icanhascheezburger cheers me up, every time
  4. Swearing in Lithuanian – this was technically research, and so I didn’t even feel that bad! my favourite? Kad tau ezhys kelnese ishdygtu – ‘let the hedgehog appear in your pants’.
  5. Trevor Goose and His Dark Night of Lights - which I’m going to see in Warwick in a couple of weeks “Is it a gig? Is it a panto? Is it a misjudged Danish cabaret? Well, it’s all three, as local heroes Talking Birds bring to Warwick Arts Centre a Christmas Show for those who want their festive entertainment skewed and a little bit heartbreaking.” Well looking forward to it.

So yes… back to writing I guess, I just struck upon the idea of using seasons, as well as Ona’s varying baby-bump, to let you know where you are in the story… might talk more about the struggles of temporal structure another time, but for now,

Adieu.

London VII

Back from London again, another interesting session – and a trip to the Science Museum (which was awesome, loads to see! Might go back next week). I’m just going to do a short round up of what we did here, plus some other character work I’ve been doing, because it’s getting closer to this weekend now, and more planning is needed! So we did two halves to the session this week- the first half was written, and the second was less so. First exercise was drawing! We were asked to draw the first scene; I struggled for a second or two, trying to decide what I wanted the first scene to be, because I’d only just decided to open up the closed space form into at least 2 more places – the brothel, and a hill. I settled on the first scene being in a room in the brothel for now (where Dominic first meets Ona – see the end of this post for new character info!) and drew away- then we were asked to draw characters, including the contents of their pockets, their clothes, where they’re from etc., new/old… see pictures for some of the work. Then we wrote the first 10 lines of dialogue, and then rewrote, trying to garner different reactions from an audience- we had to shock, tickle, educate, bore, excite, intrigue and hypnotise… all very interesting- thinking about impressions of characters and spaces, creating a whole, solid world, and also thinking about how you have a direct effect on an audience- not just a piece of paper, or a story.

Second half was a little bit hippy, but interesting nonetheless- we all lay down, closed our eyes, and Leo talked us through watching our play, really interesting, and good also that you weren’t allowed to break out and write things down, watched it a few times and I discovered some key moments, big parts in characters, felt like Dominic was emerging as a lead character- even though he was only a week old- interesting but not necessary a bad thing- as when I thought of his part in the story I definitely felt like it was coming together- so yes, really interesting.

For homework some more interesting stuff – bringing in a small bit of writing from this play (not a problem as I’m writing it this weekend!) watching a film that in some way is influencing your thinking or has something to do with the piece, and burning a soundtrack to it! Having fun, just wish the train journey back wasn’t so long… read on for new character stuff.

Characters.

Maria

29, but looks older, f, upper middle class, white. University educated- but has only worked as a secretary – she met her husband at the paper company where he is a director. Maria was her husband’s third wife, he left his first wife because she couldn’t have children, and he left his second because she gave birth to a girl. Maria’s private doctor discovered a rare heart disorder in her unborn child just before its birth, so far he has been housed in a special room and because of the privilege of their healthcare, very few people are allowed to see him, Maria has discouraged her husband from seeing him until he ‘recovers’. Maria intends to swap her terminally ill child for a ‘black market’ baby. She loves her handsome, well kept husband more than anything. Georg was put in contact with her for an extra fee when the doctor informed her of the abnormality and she broke down. The doctor assured her the ill child would be well cared for until he died.

Ona

26, but looks younger, f, working class, Lithuanian. Ona was tricked into the sex trade- her father sold her, though she thought she was going to the UK to study at a university there. She was raped and beaten for weeks by those transporting her in order to make her submissive to her eventual owner, Georg. Ona is strong mentally, though quite slight, and although submissive is prone to attempts at escape, and ‘trouble making’. She has been told that she can leave after she has paid her travel costs, she pays her way by selling at least 5 babies. Ona has given away 2 so far, she suffered from post natal infection and depression after the first, and in a fever tried to kill herself. Ona still intends to study. She intends to become a politician or a journalist- to make people aware of the trade – to stop it. She has been talking to a journalist posing as client. She has fallen in love with him.

Georg

31, m, very good English but hint of Eastern European. New money, flashy, good looking, stubbly, and broad. Georg is a pimp and a trafficker, he came into the business as a client, but spoke to a pimp about it and took interest, he saw much potential in his home-land as an ‘un-tapped resource’ and began trafficking from Lithuania. He was one of the first pimps to see the opportunity for a baby trade, and has bribed many doctors in on the business. He has many premises which pose as farms. He grew up in small town Lithuania, but inherited his father’s land and made life miserable for his tenants until his urge to make more money, and to go west got the better of him.

Dominic

Dominic is a journalist for a well known liberal broadsheet, he is planning to break a massive news story about the corruption at the heart of the baby black market. He has been posing as a client of Georg’s brothels- becoming a regular- in attempt to discover what he believes to be the other half of Georg’s business. Dominic has, however, fallen in love with Ona. He fell in love with her when he first saw her, and is willing to risk his whole operation in order to get her out.

Plot.

During the meeting to sell Ona’s 3rd child, Dominic plans to create a diversion at the baby farm in order to ‘rescue’ Ona. However Maria stops her leaving, and Dominic gets caught.



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